peter bo - Sun Dec 8 4:13 PM PSD
I like where this is going...

Zack - Mon Oct 28 2:11 AM PSD
not much to go on really. Print is dead.

NxtGhostbuster - Fri Oct 4 11:28 PM PSD
Important tip, Don't leave you readers hanging after so little of the story, I was pretty angry that you only typed like 6 paragraphs.

gb2001 - Wed Sep 11 10:04 PM PSD
huh?

Twister - Fri Aug 23 8:10 PM PSD
I'd say some detail with their lives, and an ending would be nice.

Zoul - Tue Aug 13 3:29 PM PSD
I like the idea of Ray and Winston running a used car dealership, but finish the story!