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Hey all please rate my new fan fiction
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Texasgb
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Joined: Nov 29, 2001
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 Posted: Oct 22, 2002 9:30 PM
Its called Home on The Range. (RGB)
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Nice shooting Tex!
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Agent D
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Joined: Jul 09, 2002
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Posted: Oct 22, 2002 9:39 PM
Voila. New ratings.
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Ghostbusters N.O.M.A.D. House Sitter
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"Howdy, Vakesh! Meet Winona!"
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kyleogb1983
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Joined: Jun 16, 2002
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Posted: Oct 22, 2002 9:41 PM
I rated it a ten, TexasGB .
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Kyleogb1983, The Southern Gentleman of GBN.
" If there's a haunting in the West, you can call the Best. Ghostbusters: West Coast Division"
" Did someone call for a Doctor ?"
" Dr. Stevens, reporting for duty, Sir."
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Texasgb
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Joined: Nov 29, 2001
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Posted: Oct 22, 2002 9:42 PM
Thanks! Glad you liked it!!
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Nice shooting Tex!
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river_of_slime
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Joined: Jul 07, 2002
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Posted: Oct 23, 2002 12:12 AM
It pretty good i gave it a 9 and i love the ending
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River of Slime is temporary closed.
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andophiroxia
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Joined: Jul 10, 2002
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Posted: Oct 23, 2002 11:57 PM
Heyas,
The concept was good and the plot cool. However, you might want to brush up on your paragraph structure. That's just my suggestion. Plus a bit more detail, but otherwise, good start.
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"Oh, here's your problem, you're retarded. Go sleep it off."
Fillerbunny
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Kingpin
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Joined: Aug 17, 2001
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Posted: Oct 28, 2002 9:01 AM
I suggest that you try to add in more content and what people say, only three lines are spoken by a GB, and they're all said by Venkman.  Plus, I don't really see an oil tycoon giving the guys rights to a well.
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"We have the tools, we have the talent"
The sun never sets on the British Empire...because God can't trust us in the dark! evil grin
Nightsquad gets chatting
Egon and Janine forever! Everything else is wrong
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Peter Venkmen
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Joined: Oct 24, 2002
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Posted: Oct 29, 2002 9:30 PM
If you are refering to me my name is Venkmen my father's last name is that as well. But I still like a P V pic. Anyway I don't usally have much comments. I don't talk much.
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My Mission, to insure the safety and Survival of John Conner!
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Kingpin
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Joined: Aug 17, 2001
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Posted: Nov 01, 2002 7:34 AM
What I meant, was that Peter in the fanfic is the only GB who has any lines. A good fanfic has all of the GBs getting lines so that you can put yourself into the action when reading the story.
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"We have the tools, we have the talent"
The sun never sets on the British Empire...because God can't trust us in the dark! evil grin
Nightsquad gets chatting
Egon and Janine forever! Everything else is wrong
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Peter Venkmen
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Joined: Oct 24, 2002
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Posted: Nov 02, 2002 10:14 AM
Hey I'm not writer so give me a break.
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My Mission, to insure the safety and Survival of John Conner!
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Kingpin
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Joined: Aug 17, 2001
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Posted: Nov 02, 2002 6:33 PM
Where was I criticising you?
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"We have the tools, we have the talent"
The sun never sets on the British Empire...because God can't trust us in the dark! evil grin
Nightsquad gets chatting
Egon and Janine forever! Everything else is wrong
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