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Can anyone help me finish my Fan Fic story?
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Ema
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Joined: Feb 16, 2003
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 Posted: May 27, 2003 3:14 PM
Is anyone is good at wrighting stories. It's a Blues Brothers/GBusters crossover. I've got it started but I don't know what to use as the ending. It a bit crap.
Here it is so far:
Elwood Blues returns
“Has anybody seen Dan?” Bill Murray asked. “He’s late again. We need to shoot the next scene.”
They were in the middle of the forth week of making Ghostbusters. Ivan wanted everybody to be on time for the scenes. For the past week, Dan had been late for every scene they were shooting. Nobody knew where he was going.
“Has anybody seen Dan?” Bill asked again. “Reitman is gonna have a nervous breakdown soon.”
“I haven’t seen him since… yesterday.” Ernie said. “I didn’t dare knock on his dressing room door.”
“Why?” asked Bill.
“He nearly bit my head off yesterday. I only wanted to tell him Ivan wanted to talk to him.”
“Well, I don’t care. Come on!” Bill and Ernie went to Dan’s dressing room.
“Go on then.” Bill said.
“Go on then what?” Ernie asked.
“Knock on the door.”
“Me? No way! You do it.”
“Alright. There’s no need to be scared, it’s only Dan.”
Bill knocked on the door and dived behind Ernie.
“You’re the one telling me not to be afraid?” Ernie laughed. “He mustn’t be here.” He knocked on the door. No answer. He turned the handle. It was unlocked. They both went in. The room was in a mess. Bill went over to the desk. It was covered in sheets with music on them.
“Green Onions… I Ain’t Got You… Everybody Needs Somebody. What is all this?” he asked.
“I think it’s called music.” answered Ernie.
“Well duh! I mean why is it all over Dan’s desk.”
Ernie shrugged his shoulders. “Hey look.” There was a black briefcase on the floor. He picked it up. Blues was written on it.
“That looks like the briefcase he used to use when he played Elwood Blues. In fact, it is the briefcase.”
“What is going on?” asked Ernie. “Dan’s sneaking off, there’s music sheets all over his desk, and we’ve found his old briefcase.”
Bill was about to say something when they heard noises from outside the door. He put the briefcase on the floor and they ran behind a wardrobe in the corner. The door opened and Dan walked in wearing a black suit, a black tie, black shoes, a black hat, sunglasses and a white shirt. Bill and Ernie looked at each other.
“Where is that sheet?” Dan said as he searched through the mess on the table. “Ah!” He picked up a sheet and looked ta it. He then picked up the briefcase, opened it and put the sheet inside.
“Aykroyd? Are you in there?” asked a voice from outside the door.
“Dame it! It’s Reitman!” Dan whispered. He looked round the room for a place to hide. “Ah! The wardrobe.” He was just about to hide behind it when he saw Bill Ernie.
“Murray? Hudson? What are you two doing in here?”
“That’s a really wonderful question.” Bill said. “I’d love to answer it but I’m running late.”
They came out from behind the wardrobe. They were just about to run out the door when Ivan walked in.
“This place is like the New York subway system.” Dan said. “Can I not have a bit of time to myself?”
“Excuse me, Aykroyd, but you’ve not been seen on the set since yesterday.” said Ivan. He noticed what Dan was wearing. “Why are you dressed like that?”
“Actually, I was wondering the same thing.” said Bill.
“And me.” Ernie said.
Dan looked at them. “Ah… well… ya see… em… I can’t really tell ya.”
“Why?” the three of them asked together.
That's as far as I've got. I can't think of what to write next. Can anyone help me?
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Turn your backs now and you snuff out the fragile candles of Blues, R&B, and Soul; and when those flames flicker and expire, the light of the world is extinguished because the music which has moved mankind through seven decades leading to the millenium will wither and die on the vine of abandonment and neglect. - Dan Aykroyd, Blues brothers 2000
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Lion-O
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Joined: May 18, 2003
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Posted: May 30, 2003 8:49 AM
ill give it a go but im not sure what the story lines ment to be about really but here goes
Dan looked about trying to find the easyest way out off the room, the door was blocked by Ivan, and Bill was giving him a weird look.
He began to speak but as the first words came out the Bules Mobile smashed into the side off the wall, Dan ran towards it and jumped in the drivers seat he threw the remote cotrol onto the passenger seat and put the car in reverse. Bill walked over to the now huge hole in the wall and siged "Why dont we have that on the Ecto 1?" He shouted at Ivan. "Its impossible i dont know how it works!,erm does anybody know where he's gone?" Ernie looked at them both and said"He's gone insaine thats were he's gone!".........
and i dont know what to write now because im not sure what the storys about!!
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Bender: you're full off crap fry!!!
Fry:I've got no home, no family
Bender: No friends!!!
Boss: Peter are you sleeping on the job?
Peter: No sir, there's a bug in my eye and I'm trying to suffocate him.
Doc: No! It can't be! I just sent you back to the future!
Marty McFly: You did, oh, I know, you did send me back to the future, but I'm back -- I'm back FROM the future!
Doc: Great Scott!
Lion-O: Thunder, Thunder, Thunder, THUNDERCATS HO!
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roshangar
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Joined: Jan 16, 2003
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Posted: May 30, 2003 12:51 PM
I believe somebody already wrote a GB/Blues Brothers crossover. Check it out.
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Ghostbusters Convention:I love this plan! I'm excited to be a part of it! Let's do it!
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Janine, didn't yo momma eva tell you not ta get involved with no Ghostbusta!
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Sinister
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Joined: Jul 05, 2002
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Posted: May 30, 2003 1:00 PM
That doesn't matter, you can have multiple crossovers.
Anyway, Ema, if I were you, I'd finish it yourself. That way, you'll be happy with it turning out YOUR way, and you'll be able to call it your own work!
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The resident scribe for GHOSTBUSTERS UK
GB DOOMSdAY, a crossover event unlike any other!
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Ema
Ghosthead
Joined: Feb 16, 2003
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Posted: May 31, 2003 2:37 PM
Thanks for that.
Em.... Lion-O I think I'll pass on your ending 
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Turn your backs now and you snuff out the fragile candles of Blues, R&B, and Soul; and when those flames flicker and expire, the light of the world is extinguished because the music which has moved mankind through seven decades leading to the millenium will wither and die on the vine of abandonment and neglect. - Dan Aykroyd, Blues brothers 2000
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Kingpin
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Joined: Aug 17, 2001
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Posted: Jun 03, 2003 8:53 AM
Dan stood there, their accusation and suspicion obvious in their eyes, the three faces regarded him as he stood there, suit, shades, hat and all.
Voice: Is anyone in here? Suddenly a tall figure poked his head into the trailer.
Harold: Dan?
Dan: Err...hi
Harold: Would someone please tell me what's going on here?
Bill: Actually, we were asking Dan that Bill turned back to Dan, anger now visable in his expression Well? He asked.
Dan: Well...I guess the reason why I'm dressed like this is...I miss the old days.
Ernie: The Blues Brothers are the old days?
Ivan: I think Dan might be suffering from some sorta breakdown...after John's death
To Be Continued...only if I'm ask to!
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"We have the tools, we have the talent"
The sun never sets on the British Empire...because God can't trust us in the dark! evil grin
Nightsquad gets chatting
Egon and Janine forever! Everything else is wrong
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Jackalman 99
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Joined: May 02, 2003
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Posted: Jun 25, 2003 4:28 PM
I think those recommenders who tell you to finish your story yourself are wise, so IT'S "YOUR" story. Someone wrote an Outlaw Star ff, pairing Gene & Aisha together on the ff net, then got bored with it and allowed another author to finish he fic, then the new author caused the lady to get pregnant and the 1st author didn't like it too much. 
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